8th Graders share their 6-word poetry memoirs after completing a unit on poetic devices and poetry analysis.
Tuesday, November 9, 2010
Period 3 Poems
Post 3 of your poems as comments under your class period. Make sure to give yourself credit by, at the least, signing your poem with your first name or initials.
ryan your poem is good haha did you get hurt duh you said you hurt yourself good one buddy i like that one no ryan not the fact that you got hurt well idk
emily ya the high school is pretty wierd but the teachers ya wierd jk kool poems
gettem nick quick hes coming hurry behind you oooh dont hurt him too bad i like that poem lol
Emily:1 i really liked how you said how you tould use that being at the hight school is very weird because i agree. 2 One suggestion i have is that you should use bigger words 3 i noticed that you used metaphors in your poems.
Emily, Im so sorry your house burnt down thats so sad. Your right coming to the high school was weird but it is kind of a good experience. And christmas is very very expensive.
53 comments:
1.Fell off a cliff, hurt myself.
2.Life has its ups and downs.
3.Life has me in its embrace.
--Ryan
1.Coming to the high school was weird.
2.Cristmas is awesome and very expensive.
3.My house burnt down in 2004.
- Emily
1.) He gets me, I get him.
2.) I go hunting almost every weekend.
3.) Hunting ain't fun all the time.
-NL
1. Thrown to the cieling fan; ouch!
2. Sitting in my tree stand: bang!
3. Mrs.Iby's my ELA teacher: awesome.
-Shane B.
1.poem#1 Went for a walk learend things
2.poem#2 my life is cmplecated and fun
3.peom#3 My life is differnt and complected
1.skater at day snowboarder at night
2.i was born with spinabifida,ouch
3.docter said dont sk8 very much
1. I love my puppy, he's cute.
2. I'm happy I have a cell!
3. I'm going to Florida soon; yay!
- SPT
1. Have them, can't live without them: brothers.
2. Fun, hard work, kick, dive: swimming.
3. Keep you grounded, love you; family.
--Rachel H.
Ryan i like how you used big words. One suggention i have is that you should use differnt begings I noticed you use metaphors
Ryan,
1.) i like how you decribed life
ryan your poem is good haha did you get hurt duh you said you hurt yourself good one buddy i like that one no ryan not the fact that you got hurt well idk
emily ya the high school is pretty wierd but the teachers ya wierd jk kool poems
gettem nick quick hes coming hurry behind you oooh dont hurt him too bad i like that poem lol
Emily I like how you used Imagery
Nick I like how you described hunting
Shane I like how you used onomatopoeia
1.Ryan i like how you look at life
1. I was born on May 8th.
2. I am the best football player.
3. I was ten; my grandma died
--JP SITUATION
Shane,
i noticed you used the poetic divice onomatopoeia
Zach I thank you for your comment
Emily:1 i really liked how you said how you tould use that being at the hight school is very weird because i agree. 2 One suggestion i have is that you should use bigger words 3 i noticed that you used metaphors in your poems.
emily one thing i suggestion i have is you should not set your house on fire again
Emily,
i agree christmas is awesome but it does cost alot of money
hey pat you went for a walk kool i love walking
hey Mr.soup i like skiing but snow boarding is fun too and skating is amazing
ya nick i agree about ryan and how he described life good good good......jus keep swimming jus keep swimming what do we do we swim...SWIM
Emily,
Im so sorry your house burnt down thats so sad. Your right coming to the high school was weird but it is kind of a good experience. And christmas is very very expensive.
Ryan, i like how you said life has its ups and downs. it is so true.
--Emily
shane your comment was umm... Interesting
ryan,I really like how you describe life.
one suggestion i have is that you dont fall off any more cliffs
i noticed you used the poetic device metaphor
emily i really like how you said coming to the high school is weird becouse i agree with you
soup, i really like how u scate at night becouse it sounds fun
i nooteced you used the poetic device repitition on the word complicated
Patrick your life sounds very interesting.
Shane, one suggestion i have is that you dont get thrown in a fan. it sounds like it really.
--Emily
Patrick,
I like how you put that your life is different.
Shane, how mean of your cousin to throw you into a ceiling fan.
Zach what is spinabifida
soup,
your 1st poem I like the best I can picture it
oh and like the name
JP SITUATION
Shae, i really like how you said you r going to florida. i hope you have fun. i loved florida.
--Emily
i like soup hehe
Patrick,
i thnk u need 2 rily work on ur spellin and grammr
life dose have its ups and downs everyone gets threw it
SHANE
U REALY GOT THOWN IN THE FAN MAN THAT GOT TO HURT
1.I'm sorry, I didn't mean it
2.I'm wierd, but I like it
3.Bathroom walls definatley don't know anything.
The eye's of the other world.
The big monster ate my cookie.
My life is a big mystery.
1. Best friends can be mortal
2. enemies. Life can be a confusing fun.
3. My room is a disturbing mess.
1. Short person surrounded by tall people
2. underestimated because im not very big
3. patriots should have won against giants
-Enjoy like there is no tomorrow!<3
-keep your friends close to you!(:
-i could have a better life..(:
1.oh no i hate the dentist
2.what happened to my candy bar
3.no my family lives with me
I like food caz im fat
I am cool you know it
Im actually not totally completly dumb
Bye DyLaN
1.Bird lives then he dies.
2.sister for sale pleas take asap
3.Bought candy bar lasted five seconds
1.My family really,really loves me.
2.I have a lot of secrets.
3.I love to hang with friends.
1. Pet gummy bear ate my homework.
2. Six letter poems... are hard to write.
3. My sister got a air horn...
4. We will never sleep again... ever.
haha matt your's is rlly funny, nice to know you wanna sell your sister(:
1. my dead mind by my school
2. forget video games play mind games
3.life is a huge corn dog
sam,
haha bathroom walls really dont know anything!!! lol
1. Pet gummy bear ate homework.
2. My Sister got an air horn...
3. We will never sleep again... ever!
4. Six word poems... Hard to write.
1. I like to skate; it's fun.
2. Going down the hill: ouch; gravity!
3. Playing basketball: shooting hoops, getting re-bounds.
Cody
pgordon:one suggestion i have is to watch your spelling!
nick:i like hunting to becase of the rush of seeing a deer
ryan:ouch that must of hurt i really liked how you described it.
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